Hey Will. I am not super familiar with breakcore, but I think I can see what you were going for. In the drums I don't think there is quite enough for the listener to hold on to to keep the song together. There needs to be a little bit more of a recognizable pulse. Dialed all the way down that is kick on 1 and 3 and snare on 2 and 4 (the money beat). This has to be your starting point before you go and start breaking the rules. As you think about song structure you want to start to think in phrases. Typically bars of 1,2,4,8,16. These are the places that we are used to hearing ideas repeat. Even if you have complete chaos if it regularly repeated every 1,2,4,8, or 16 bars you would end up with something that we could call music. Wynton Marsalis said that music is organized sound, if it's organized in someway it can be considered music. So your goal it seems, is to push the limits of organization without loosing the ability to call it music. To do this I would suggest you give slightly more organization. Perhaps a more recognizable phrase in your drums. Get a strong down beat on the kick, or a strong 2 or 4 accent on the snare more often. You have to give the listener points in the music where they can gain their bearings, and then you can scramble things up again. Music is all about tension and release.